Darkfire

Name: Darkfire
Gender:male
Age: 15 moons
Affiliate:Shadowclan
Rank:warrior

Looks: Glossy black fur with dark blue eyes.Long black ears. Long sleek tail.
Personality: Very independant. Very stubborn. Follows only his own rules.He is very headstrong and will fight instead of talking out the situation. He doesn't care much for every one else. He thinks he's better than everyone else.
Birth:Loner
History:Darkfire was born to a sick cat, who died quickly after Darkfire's birth.Darkfirewas abandoned by his father in the forest,and wandered through the forest, alone, towards shadow clan. When Darkfire wandered in the forest, he learned millions of ways to protect himself in life - threatening situations.
RP Sample: Darkfire wandered through the forest, looking in every direction for an opening. Every sound made Darkfire hiss, his back arching. An opening came in front of Darkfire urging him foreward. He came upon a group of cats, who surrounded Darkfire,his eyes bulging. He shrunk back, suddenly shy. He looked at every cat, seeing their welcoming faces. He stepped foreward , licking his paw awkwardly.

There is already a ShadowClan leader. And if he's a warrior, then he should not have "star" as the second part of his name. Only leaders have star at the end of their name, so you should change it.

History is four sentences, Personality is three, Appearance is three or a picture.

Hopefully, i didnt mess it up. Fixed it

Appearance still too short, add a sentence. Please make the personality a little more detailed and give it some more depth. I think the history is ok though?

No, the history isn't okay because it confuses me and is too redundant for my liking.

Nah, it's fine. XD

Please tell i did this right for once O.o

Make the appearance more detailed.

Flint, you know good and well that the appearence doesn't need to be more detailed.

Member, you know good and well that I don't care about your input in anything.

Then you know how to waste a loooot of time.

um, should i fix it or not?

Yes.